Comments on: First Lines: A contest!

By: dgm_sf

dgm_sf — Sat, 01 May 2010 15:29:27 +0000

The little children came early to the hangings.

By: Anonymous

Anonymous — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 18:50:34 +0000

I wonder if Jim knows that some people posted their first lines on the Dystel Facebook page.

By: Mike Jung

Mike Jung — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 12:19:51 +0000

Whoops, like another contestant, my story is upper MG too – please disregard my entry. Sorry aobut that.

By: February Grace

February Grace — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 03:51:34 +0000

Aww man, I just missed the deadline.

But for the sake of other readers maybe giving feedback on it anyway...

"Intersecting beams of refracted light cut through her, glaring so violently she could no longer bear to see."

By: Carol Anne

Carol Anne — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 02:01:10 +0000

I should have had a plan of some kind, because that was the kind of person I was.

By: Anonymous

Anonymous — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 01:06:32 +0000

From my YA fictional memoir/novel:

We were standing together, naked and shivering, when the heavy metal doors slammed behind us and we heard the gas hissing in, and then suddenly, through the fog, we heard shouts coming from outside – "The twins! Where are the twins?" – and the chamber door opened to reveal Dr. Mengele.

By: StrugglingToMakeIt

StrugglingToMakeIt — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 00:20:15 +0000

I don't know if "end of day" means end of business day or midnight, but here goes just in case:

I was wearing pink Converse at prom.

Thanks!

By: Debbie

Debbie — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 00:00:21 +0000

One abstract string binds me to Padre; a mutual exchange of knowledge.

Horror

Thank you for the opportunity.

By: Larry

Larry — Thu, 22 Apr 2010 23:34:58 +0000

First line:
He waited.

By: Stacie

Stacie — Thu, 22 Apr 2010 23:12:58 +0000

From my mystery novel:

"The color pink, no matter what the shade, had never done me any favors; today was no exception."